Friday, March 14, 2014

night

slow snick snick snick
toes along the corridor
waiting for an open door

faster coming back in

around and around
measuring cosiness curling
into a warm furry pretzel

muffled rhythm
thup thup thup
wagging on the floorboards

---

panting
close and insistent
anxious
finally
we hear the thunder too

for dverse

24 comments:

jo-hanna said...

So full of comfortingly wellknown sounds.
doesn't need eyes to be appreciated. Well done.

Brian Miller said...

smiles....ah the pups...hearing it /sensing it well before we...anxious , waiting...i wonder if he ever wonders why we cant sense it...smiles.....

kkkkaty said...

...the beginnings of a storm; glad you are cozy and inside ;)

Mary said...

Love the 'snick snick snick' which I can REALLY hear! Your poem really portrays the idea well that sometimes animals know what is coming weatherwise before we humans do!

Heaven said...

I like the imagery of warm furry pretzel ~ The sounds are great including the muffled rhythm ~

Cressida de Nova said...

I like the wagging thumps on the floorboards.

Laurie Kolp said...

aww... my dogs don't like thunder either

Gabriella said...

I liked how you expressed how our four-legged friends can feel a storm is about to break up somewhat before we do. The closing line nicely conveys that we certainly like this kind of prescience.

Glenn Buttkus said...

A near perfect response to the blind prompt; could see it all, even though we did not "look" at it; pets bring so much to our lives; fur kids.

Victoria said...

Really good detail in this--you drew me right into the scene.

Björn said...

A night like this..sounds like going to sleep will be difficult....but maybe finding some harmony in the cocoon of night,

Gabriella said...

It is so true that our four-legged friends have some kind of prescience we have no idea of. And the closing lines just show our limited knowledge compared to theirs.

vb holmes said...

Good capture of a dog's sensitivity to its environment and its physical reaction. "Warm and fuzzy" is a good description.

kaykuala said...

They somehow sense it earlier with strange behaviors. Animals were known to move round and round before the tsunami in Thailand. Wonderful take lucy!

Hank

manicddaily said...

Reminds me of the fog-cat in Eliot--very charming--I love the idea of the night (or of a cat) sounding softly in its curl. k.

Rosemary Nissen-Wade said...

I love the way you created the dog without ever using the word! :)

Grace said...

(Commenting again as I see that my comment didn't show)

I like the imagery of warm furry pretzel and the sounds - snick/thup ~

Well done with the prompt ~

grapeling said...

excellent use of onomatopoeia - could envision this perfectly ~

Loredana Donovan said...

Aww how sweet ... I love all the sounds, creating tension felt by the dog ... they do get scared of storms and can sense them. Lovely take on the prompt. Thank you for stopping by my blog :)

quest4peas said...

very cool. I thought it was a dog right away, but didn't suspect he/she was anxious about a coming storm. Love how you brought the feelings of the dog into this, as well as your own auditory experience.

litwist said...

I love how you lead us to the end without ever saying "dog" or "puppy." Heard this loud and clear... smiles. Really felt the warmth.

Lila

Heidi said...

I completely miss my dog right now. Beautiful poem and you tell a sweet story.

hyperCRYPTICal said...

So well done. Our furry friends have a keener sense of their world than we.
Anna :o]

Akila G said...

very nice! very different